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hand full of hair, your skin on my teeth
nails down my back, a hundred heart beats

we've been here  before
but still you fail to breathe, my eyes meeting yours

penetrating every thought
all attempts to speak
are all for not
though there's really no need

for we both know
this moment consumes what we are
every kiss, caress,
potentially a scar

left on our body's, hearts, and minds,
so much damage done in so little time.

till we both have no choice, but to lie in embrace
hearts racing skin bleeding on the pillow case
the second version i like it better
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anniexhx Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
well done
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you
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anniexhx Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yw :)
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Ominako Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Good writing skills you're really good!
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you
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Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Student Writer
I know I favorited this before, but I just have to say how much I love it.
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Professional General Artist
Thank you so much
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Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Student Writer
No problem dear!
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TristanCody Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Student Writer
I really liked this piece.

I noticed that on the first line of the second couplet, you double spaced. Just thought I would mention it in case you missed that.

May I ask why you did not capitalize or use punctuation?

Great work,
Thank you for sharing.
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Professional General Artist
Thank you, and I merely have terrible grammar.
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TristanCody Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student Writer
You're most welcome. Well, in that case, it is was still a very wonderful piece. Thanks again.
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Alianka Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
wow you get me with this^^
i really want to feel that with someone... amazing
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Professional General Artist
thank you
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Alianka Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
you are welcome^^
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Momo587 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
"till we both have no choice, but to lie in embrace
hearts racing skin bleeding on the pillow case"

I liked these lines the most.. It's a nice poem (^-^)

(and I am really sorry to point this out, but you should add an "e" to the end of "Breath" so it becomes "Breathe" the act of exhaling and inhaling) ^^;
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Professional General Artist
Thank you.
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Momo587 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Anytime.
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A-Cute-Monstrosity Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Student Writer
Absolutely beautiful!
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2012  Professional General Artist
thank you.
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danisuh Featured By Owner May 27, 2010   Traditional Artist
I really like this. My favorite line is"every kiss, caress, potentially a scar...", beautiful.;)
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner May 28, 2010  Professional General Artist
hmhmhm thank you
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Young-Haiku-Poet Featured By Owner May 27, 2010
Wow, this work is beautiful, portraying the struggle of love or an affair? Either way, it's beautiful

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skruffy123 Featured By Owner May 27, 2010  Professional General Artist
thanks !
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Young-Haiku-Poet Featured By Owner May 27, 2010
:)
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:icontheforeignconstantin:
I don't usually read poems but i'm glad i got to read this one! Keep up the good work!
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner May 27, 2010  Professional General Artist
thank you it means alot to me
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Elizabeth-Legacy Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2010
I really liked this. Seemed like i could relate to it. Thank you for coming up with it. Made me think :)...(which I sometimes forget to do :) )
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2010  Professional General Artist
i'm glad you liked it. ^_^
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Elizabeth-Legacy Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2010
:)
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DuzzY1981 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2009
i love this piece :) keep it up
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2009  Professional General Artist
thanks so much and i'll try
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Alphabeth Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2009
nice... ;)
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2009  Professional General Artist
thanks
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talbotC Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I really loved it.
And I thought my erotic poetry was something! ;) This is beyond words. It's wonderful!
And yes, I think I MUST watch every each poem you upload. Keep on the erotic ones! ;)
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2009  Professional General Artist
hmhmhm im glad ^_ and i plan to lol ... hmhmhm i will soon hopefully but urs are awezing trust me loved the one i added
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Lil-Niki Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2009
Omg, lovely! <3
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2009  Professional General Artist
thank u so much for the fave. it makes me very happy that u liked it.
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pickery Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009
"for we both know
this moment consumes what we are
every kiss, caress,
potentially a scar"

I love this part of the poem <3 :)
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2009  Professional General Artist
thank u and im very glad u like it ^_^
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LastGlance Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
wow this is epic :) it's written so visually, i got shivers-well done!
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2009  Professional General Artist
thak you and im glad ^_^
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2009  Professional General Artist
"I know it's probably not the kind of opinion you want on it, but I really liked this one because it turned me on. I mean, it turned me on, but at the same time, it left me with this foreboding sense of uneasiness. It made me feel like it was amazing, but that that one night was all there was going to be. I don't know if that even made sense."


- rebekah
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:icondollwiththeglasslook:
Really nice, strong and emotional!

:love:
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wildplaces Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2009
The emotional content is very impressive, but technically I don't think this is as strong as your recent wonderful sonnet . . . Second and third stanzas seem forced. End of the poem is much stronger. . . Those rhyming couplets are really hard to get right. Worth working on as you definitely have a great feel for words, images. (Sorry if this constructive crit is not what you're after.)
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2009  Professional General Artist
its exactly what im after ^_^ thanks i will definitely look at that.
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batorr Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2009
Nice words....!!!
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skruffy123 Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2009  Professional General Artist
thanks
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XwolfXbangXtroubleX Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2009
Very intense I have to say, but I liked it.
In my head I read it to the tune of Isis by Bob Dylan......it was fun to read is again and again lol.
Maybe sometime you can stop by my gallery and check out my (very few) poems and let me know what you think.
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undoings Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2009
brava!
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man-d Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2009
I think "New Moon" just got it's epigraph!
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