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hand full of hair, your skin on my teeth
nails down my back, a hundred heart beats

we've been here  before
but still you fail to breathe, my eyes meeting yours

penetrating every thought
all attempts to speak
are all for not
though there's really no need

for we both know
this moment consumes what we are
every kiss, caress,
potentially a scar

left on our body's, hearts, and minds,
so much damage done in so little time.

till we both have no choice, but to lie in embrace
hearts racing skin bleeding on the pillow case
the second version i like it better
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anniexhx Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
well done
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skruffy123 Mar 7, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you
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anniexhx Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yw :)
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Ominako Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Good writing skills you're really good!
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skruffy123 Mar 7, 2013  Professional General Artist
thank you
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Oilux Dec 12, 2012  Student Writer
I know I favorited this before, but I just have to say how much I love it.
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skruffy123 Dec 12, 2012  Professional General Artist
Thank you so much
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Oilux Dec 12, 2012  Student Writer
No problem dear!
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TristanCody Nov 28, 2012  Student Writer
I really liked this piece.

I noticed that on the first line of the second couplet, you double spaced. Just thought I would mention it in case you missed that.

May I ask why you did not capitalize or use punctuation?

Great work,
Thank you for sharing.
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skruffy123 Nov 29, 2012  Professional General Artist
Thank you, and I merely have terrible grammar.
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